Poem

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  1. Burstsovenergy24

    Burstsovenergy24 Larger Pacific Striped Octopus Supporter

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    Im trying to write a 20 line poem about octopuses. Here's what I have so far:


    It lives beneath the sea,
    And stalks its prey magnificently,
    Its able to cloak itself in colors,
    And jet away from predators,
    To live another day.

    With 3 hearts to pump blood,
    8 arms to help move,
    A rectanglular pupil and a complex eye,
    A beak to crush food,



    Any ideas? :heee:
     
  2. um...

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    I'd like to help, but all my poems just end up as cloying odes to Tintenfisch and such. :heee:
     
  3. Burstsovenergy24

    Burstsovenergy24 Larger Pacific Striped Octopus Supporter

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    :lol:

    (so?)
    :mrgreen:
     
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    :lol: LoL

    Maybe try something to do with ink, suckers, siphons, inteligence and writhing tentacles?
     
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    Burstsovenergy24 Larger Pacific Striped Octopus Supporter

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    Thanks Joel!


    Ok here goes again:

    The Octopus

    It lives beneath the sea,
    And stalks its prey magnificently,
    Its able to cloak itself in colors,
    And jet away from predators,
    To live another day.

    It has 3 hearts to pump blood,
    8 arms to help move,
    Suckers on those arms,
    A beak to crush food,
    And a rectanglular pupil.

    It can squirt ink,
    To protect itself from harm,
    So it can shoot away to safety,
    (still need stuff here)
    (and here)

    It has the intelligence of a child,
    Some say of a 3 year old,
    Able to go through mazes,
    With its super mollusk smarts,
    To conquer most anything.


    Sound good? :)
     
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    I like! what about

    and squeeze into a rocky den
    to while away the day


    BTW I'm NO poet (i'm sure you noticed!!!!!! :D )

    J
     
  7. Burstsovenergy24

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    Great!

    I guess this is the final copy unless anyone can think of something. :D


    The Octopus

    It lives beneath the sea,
    And stalks its prey magnificently,
    Its able to cloak itself in colors,
    And jet away from predators,
    To live another day.

    It has 3 hearts to pump blood,
    8 arms to help move,
    Suckers on those arms,
    A beak to crush food,
    And a rectanglular pupil.

    It can squirt ink,
    To protect itself from harm,
    So it can shoot away to safety,
    and squeeze into a rocky den,
    to while away the day.

    It has the intelligence of a child,
    Some say of a 3 year old,
    Able to go through mazes,
    With its super mollusk smarts,
    To conquer most anything.
     
  8. joel_ang

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    Ever thought on putting a mimic octo and maybe blue rings and bimacs? We need Bimac and Mimic smilies by the way.
     
  9. um...

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    And a sea badger smiley.
     
  10. Colin

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    damn straight!

    his name is BOE,
    and a poem of his i see,
    its something to do with octopuses,
    and this last line wont rhyme
    [/b]
     
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    Dont make fun of me cause I cant rhyme! :x

    That's why I have yall!
    :heee:
     
  12. NickA5582

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    And a congratulations smilie.
    What about a Neil smiley?

    :thumbsup: Good stuff, much better than anything I could come up with.
    :)
     
  13. Burstsovenergy24

    Burstsovenergy24 Larger Pacific Striped Octopus Supporter

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    Ill make that one. :twisted:

    The What about a Neil smiley?
     
  14. um...

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    :heee:

    We still need a proper smiley for :twisted:.
     
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    Hehe:
     
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    That's my intention. :lol:
     
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    :lol: That's even better than the job I did on Frank.
     
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    :lol: Nice one :)
     
  20. Colin

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    if you can make an avatar of frank octo related, i can use him as an avator again :)
     

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