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Burstsovenergy24

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Im trying to write a 20 line poem about octopuses. Here's what I have so far:


It lives beneath the sea,
And stalks its prey magnificently,
Its able to cloak itself in colors,
And jet away from predators,
To live another day.

With 3 hearts to pump blood,
8 arms to help move,
A rectanglular pupil and a complex eye,
A beak to crush food,



Any ideas? :heee:
 

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I'd like to help, but all my poems just end up as cloying odes to Tintenfisch and such. :heee:
 

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:lol: LoL

Maybe try something to do with ink, suckers, siphons, inteligence and writhing tentacles?
 

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Thanks Joel!


Ok here goes again:

The Octopus

It lives beneath the sea,
And stalks its prey magnificently,
Its able to cloak itself in colors,
And jet away from predators,
To live another day.

It has 3 hearts to pump blood,
8 arms to help move,
Suckers on those arms,
A beak to crush food,
And a rectanglular pupil.

It can squirt ink,
To protect itself from harm,
So it can shoot away to safety,
(still need stuff here)
(and here)

It has the intelligence of a child,
Some say of a 3 year old,
Able to go through mazes,
With its super mollusk smarts,
To conquer most anything.


Sound good? :)
 

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Burstsovenergy24 said:
(still need stuff here)
(and here)
I like! what about

and squeeze into a rocky den
to while away the day


BTW I'm NO poet (i'm sure you noticed!!!!!! :biggrin2: )

J
 

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Great!

I guess this is the final copy unless anyone can think of something. :biggrin2:


The Octopus

It lives beneath the sea,
And stalks its prey magnificently,
Its able to cloak itself in colors,
And jet away from predators,
To live another day.

It has 3 hearts to pump blood,
8 arms to help move,
Suckers on those arms,
A beak to crush food,
And a rectanglular pupil.

It can squirt ink,
To protect itself from harm,
So it can shoot away to safety,
and squeeze into a rocky den,
to while away the day.

It has the intelligence of a child,
Some say of a 3 year old,
Able to go through mazes,
With its super mollusk smarts,
To conquer most anything.
 

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Ever thought on putting a mimic octo and maybe blue rings and bimacs? We need Bimac and Mimic smilies by the way.
 

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And a sea badger smiley.
 

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damn straight!

his name is BOE,
and a poem of his i see,
its something to do with octopuses,
and this last line wont rhyme
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um... said:
And a sea badger smiley.
And a congratulations smilie.
What about a Neil smiley?

:thumbsup: Good stuff, much better than anything I could come up with.
:)
 

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:heee:

We still need a proper smiley for :twisted:.
 

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:lol: That's even better than the job I did on Frank.
 

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um... said:
:lol: That's even better than the job I did on Frank.
if you can make an avatar of frank octo related, i can use him as an avator again :)
 

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