Poem

Burstsovenergy24

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Im trying to write a 20 line poem about octopuses. Here's what I have so far:


It lives beneath the sea,
And stalks its prey magnificently,
Its able to cloak itself in colors,
And jet away from predators,
To live another day.

With 3 hearts to pump blood,
8 arms to help move,
A rectanglular pupil and a complex eye,
A beak to crush food,



Any ideas? :heee:
 

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I'd like to help, but all my poems just end up as cloying odes to Tintenfisch and such. :heee:
 

Burstsovenergy24

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Thanks Joel!


Ok here goes again:

The Octopus

It lives beneath the sea,
And stalks its prey magnificently,
Its able to cloak itself in colors,
And jet away from predators,
To live another day.

It has 3 hearts to pump blood,
8 arms to help move,
Suckers on those arms,
A beak to crush food,
And a rectanglular pupil.

It can squirt ink,
To protect itself from harm,
So it can shoot away to safety,
(still need stuff here)
(and here)

It has the intelligence of a child,
Some say of a 3 year old,
Able to go through mazes,
With its super mollusk smarts,
To conquer most anything.


Sound good? :)
 

Burstsovenergy24

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Great!

I guess this is the final copy unless anyone can think of something. :biggrin2:


The Octopus

It lives beneath the sea,
And stalks its prey magnificently,
Its able to cloak itself in colors,
And jet away from predators,
To live another day.

It has 3 hearts to pump blood,
8 arms to help move,
Suckers on those arms,
A beak to crush food,
And a rectanglular pupil.

It can squirt ink,
To protect itself from harm,
So it can shoot away to safety,
and squeeze into a rocky den,
to while away the day.

It has the intelligence of a child,
Some say of a 3 year old,
Able to go through mazes,
With its super mollusk smarts,
To conquer most anything.
 

joel_ang

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#8
Ever thought on putting a mimic octo and maybe blue rings and bimacs? We need Bimac and Mimic smilies by the way.
 

Colin

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#10
damn straight!

his name is BOE,
and a poem of his i see,
its something to do with octopuses,
and this last line wont rhyme
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