Im trying to write a 20 line poem about octopuses. Here's what I have so far:


It lives beneath the sea,
And stalks its prey magnificently,
Its able to cloak itself in colors,
And jet away from predators,
To live another day.

With 3 hearts to pump blood,
8 arms to help move,
A rectanglular pupil and a complex eye,
A beak to crush food,


Any ideas? :heee:

I'd like to help, but all my poems just end up as cloying odes to Tintenfisch and such. :heee:

:lol:

(so?)
:mrgreen:

:lol: LoL

Maybe try something to do with ink, suckers, siphons, inteligence and writhing tentacles?

Thanks Joel!


Ok here goes again:

The Octopus

It lives beneath the sea,
And stalks its prey magnificently,
Its able to cloak itself in colors,
And jet away from predators,
To live another day.

It has 3 hearts to pump blood,
8 arms to help move,
Suckers on those arms,
A beak to crush food,
And a rectanglular pupil.

It can squirt ink,
To protect itself from harm,
So it can shoot away to safety,
(still need stuff here)
(and here)

It has the intelligence of a child,
Some say of a 3 year old,
Able to go through mazes,
With its super mollusk smarts,
To conquer most anything.

Sound good? :)

(still need stuff here)
(and here)



I like! what about

and squeeze into a rocky den
to while away the day


BTW I'm NO poet (i'm sure you noticed!!!!!! :D )

J

Great!

I guess this is the final copy unless anyone can think of something. :D


The Octopus

It lives beneath the sea,
And stalks its prey magnificently,
Its able to cloak itself in colors,
And jet away from predators,
To live another day.

It has 3 hearts to pump blood,
8 arms to help move,
Suckers on those arms,
A beak to crush food,
And a rectanglular pupil.

It can squirt ink,
To protect itself from harm,
So it can shoot away to safety,
and squeeze into a rocky den,
to while away the day.

It has the intelligence of a child,
Some say of a 3 year old,
Able to go through mazes,
With its super mollusk smarts,
To conquer most anything.

Ever thought on putting a mimic octo and maybe blue rings and bimacs? We need Bimac and Mimic smilies by the way.

And a sea badger smiley.

damn straight!

his name is BOE,
and a poem of his i see,
its something to do with octopuses,
and this last line wont rhyme[/b]

Dont make fun of me cause I cant rhyme! :x

That's why I have yall!
:heee:

And a sea badger smiley.

And a congratulations smilie.
What about a Neil smiley?

:thumbsup: Good stuff, much better than anything I could come up with.
:)

Ill make that one. :twisted:

The What about a Neil smiley?

:heee:

We still need a proper smiley for :twisted:.

Hehe:

:roflmao:

That's my intention. :lol:

:lol: That's even better than the job I did on Frank.

:lol: Nice one :)

:lol: That's even better than the job I did on Frank.

if you can make an avatar of frank octo related, i can use him as an avator again :)

How about a great big octopus eating Frank?

was thinking more along the lines of franks pet octopus being set on neil

Now that would just be silly.

ah yes, and we are always so sensible

:indiffer:

:lol:

(so?)
:mrgreen:

:periscop:

ooppps!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

when was the last time anyone posted something of use on this thread?

a whole lotta :talker: but no :whalevsa: or :beer:

i think i need to work on some more haiku.....

i think i need to work on some more haiku.....
There is far too little haiku around here.

when was the last time anyone posted something of use on this thread?

a whole lotta :talker: but no :whalevsa: or :beer:

i think i need to work on some more haiku.....

did it start with anything of any use? :D

Hey guys, I just wanna thank yall again for all your help!

The poem got nominated to win an award! :D

:shock: How did I miss this thread?? Looks like prime deletion meat in here... yum...

But back to the topic at hand... congrats on the nomination! What kind of award?

:oops:

BOE, that's great to hear. Sorry for being useless.

:shock: How did I miss this thread?? Looks like prime deletion meat in here... yum...

But back to the topic at hand... congrats on the nomination! What kind of award?

I dunno. I guess Ill find out if I win!

Oops, yeah, I asked the wrong question... I meant, "what kind of contest?"

Good luck in any event!

Uhh, I really dont know! I just turned it in and heard it got nominated! :D

BOE, congratulations on your octopus poem being so well-received. It's terrific. Sorry to be so late saying so - I only just read about it, don't know how I missed it.

Melissa

Cool, good luck! :D

ditto I must have been a sleep at the wheel on this one but congrats, 8) wish I would have seen this from the beginning :oops:

But then again I wouldn't want to be labeled useless :lol: